How to write a Thesis Statement # 2

How to write a Thesis Statement


English IB IV and V

Mrs. Shaw

What is it?

Your thesis is the basic stand you take, the opinion you express, and the central point you wish to make.

It’s your controlling idea, tying together and giving direction to all of the separate elements in your paper.

Your primary purpose is to persuade the reader that your thesis is valid.

Most Important!!!!

The most important thing to understand before you create your thesis statement is that it MUST contain two parts, a subject (also called a topic) and an opinion or assertion about that subject.

Let’s start:

When defining your thesis, start by writing a one-sentence version of the thesis called a thesis statement. For example,

1. Professor Smith (subject) is a classic absentminded professor (opinion about subject).

2. Professor Smith’s colorful personality (subject) makes her a great lecturer (opinion).



Limited Subject Thesis Statement

1. Professor X Professor X is an incompetent teacher.

2. Commercials Television commercials can be great entertainment.

Writing with a thesis gives a paper an intrinsic dramatic interest. You, as the writer, commit yourself. You have something at stake: “This is what I believe, and this is why I’m right.” You say, “Professor X is incompetent.” Your reader says, “Tell me why you think so.” You say, “I’ll be glad to.” Your reader says, “I’m listening,” and you’re ready to go.

A Thesis is not…

1. A Thesis is not a Title

Title: Not a Thesis

An Enlightening Experience

Thesis Statement

My first day at Katella High School was an enlightening experience.



2. A Thesis is not an Announcement of the Subject

Announcement: Not a Thesis This paper will attempt to explain why the boys split into two hostile groups.

Thesis Statement

The boys split into two hostile groups because of their inherent violent nature



3. A Thesis Statement is Not a Statement of Absolute Fact A thesis makes a judgment or interpretation. There’s no way to spend a whole paper supporting a statement that needs no support.

Fact: Not a Thesis

1. Jack felt anger towards Ralph and eventually formed his own group.

2. Bellevue High School’s colors are Blue and Gold.

What a Good Thesis Is

A Good Thesis is Restricted. It deals with restricted, bite-size issues rather than issues that would require a lifetime to discuss intelligently.

The more restricted the thesis, the better the chances are for supporting it fully.

Samples:

Poor Statement:

The boys are either mean or savage.

Better Statement:

Roger’s actions represent the basic cruelty inherent in every human being.

Poor Statement:

People are too selfish.

Better Statement:

Teenage selfishness is seen at its worst at 2:35 in the afternoon, when all student-drivers are trying to leave the parking lot.



A Good Thesis is Unified. It expresses one major idea about its subject. The tight structure of your paper depends on its working to support that ONE IDEA.

POOR: People trapped on islands aren’t usually captivating, but people have always liked learning about their stories, and many fine writers have written about their plights.

BETTER: Islands provide enchanting settings for stories that appeal to the basic human desire for adventure.

Let’s Try to Make it Better

POOR: The new milk machine program is excellent.

BETTER:



A Good Thesis is Specific. There is not enough time to be vague! “The new gym is impressive,” for example, could mean anything from impressively beautiful to impressively ugly. With a thesis statement like “Our principal is cool,” you would probably have to spend more words defining “cool” than discussing the principal. Even when there’s no likelihood of confusion, vague ideas normally come through as so familiar or dull or universally accepted that the reader sees no point in paying attention to them.

The thesis statement has TWO MAIN VALUES:

1. It serves as a test of whether your main idea meets the requirements above; and

2. It is a constant, compact reminder of the point your paper must make, and it is therefore an indispensable means of determining the relevancy or irrelevancy, the logic or lack of logic, of all the material that goes into the paper.



A Checklist for deciding if your thesis is effective:

__The thesis statement presents an opinion that is sufficiently limited.

__The thesis statement answers “So What” by saying something meaningful.

__The thesis statement presents an arguable statement which can be supported and is worth exploring.

__The thesis statement answers all parts of the question or prompt.

__The thesis statement asserts a single idea. (No more than one!)

__The thesis statement is located at the beginning of the paper.